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  • My poems too

    2009-01-09 2:40AM / 標準BLOG / 會員可以看
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     Before I decided to turn back to comic books (which was my first love) i was a film director. I made documentary films mainly, a few of which were shown on British TV and also in Japan. But before that my main outlet of creativity was poetry, and prose poems. Seeing some poetry here has inspired my to put up a few of mine too. Here are some 'prose poems' then, meaning prose with poetic qualities, rather than poetry with distinct rhymes or lines:


     The unveiling
    Wraps of traditional clothing hiding sensous body. Many years of waiting, movements all a practise for this great unveiling in the sight of the handsome young man. Dream filled nights of romantic ignorance. You caress your thighs, feelings of incredible indulgence, outrageous nakedness. Some feeling of shame overcomes you, so that you partially cover up. Yet the feeling is too strong, irresistable after all those years. So now the layers are completely cast aside, all culture has been stripped off you - now what separates you from the beasts? You twist and moan, sigh in undulations, and in your dark eyes, a spark of liberation! 


    Now you are gone
    Sadness at the heart, so what is new about that? Point me at the core of your being, the new birth in the world, a spark unseen in any other light. You individual star, flickering out. I’m in darkness, now you are gone. 


    Flowing
    The flow of time has destroyed me, I have died in all my yesterdays, I will also die today, even in the moment. Who was it that started this poem? And who will finish it for me… 


    The Unfolding
    Sublime power at the heart of the movement. Not everyone agreed with your smile. How strange that you should continue anyhow, strong hearted confidence and such repose. You talk like the tingling of ivory, a violin seems to alter the sound of the surrounding air, your voice rises on the crest.  Tell me about me, you don’t even know you. Everything is within that closed left hand, slowly unfolding…He talks just like himself, but looks a little different; she says she loves herself, but don’t let that stop you.  After all, you open you eyes on a new morning and feel blessed, don’t you? All those words are from here, lingering and waiting. You look at it, the geography of desire, the search for meaning, holy sepulchre from invisible substance made; not found on this planet until you came along. Show to us the products of that unfolding. 


    The tyranny of time
    That summer’s gone, a magic smile uncaptured, bronzed skin just right. Touch me again tomorrow, or I’ll go crazy. Recovering takes time, of which I still have plenty. But now I am older I sense the ending of time approach like a wall coming in closer to my body, getting ready to end me. 


    Scottish song
    In song ye gathered us tae ye, we were gey few and no awfy guid. But we were gey strang inside oh us and followed ye tae the ends. Yer spirit turned on that devotion, and endless power. We felt like nuthin could haud us doon from daein whit we wanted tae dae, and being wha we wanted tae be. I felt alive then, more than I'd ever done.

     - that last one is partly in SCOTS, the language of Scotland (alongside Gaelic and modern English) Sorry if you can't understand it!   


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  • mariejost
    藝術家空間 
    留言於2009-01-20 9:24PM [举报]
    I think you should take some of your shorter prose poems and arrange them in lines and see how they read.  It is a bit hard to read them all mushed together in a single paragraph.  There seem to be some proper poems (not simply "prose" poems) here, but they are harder to read when one lines runs right into the next.  Just because they don't have rhyme and meter doesn't necessarily mean that they are prose poems.  I interpret a prose poem as a poem that functions best as a block of text, sort of like stream of consciousness prose writing.  I think something like your poem "Sadness", for example, would really come alive on the page and breathe, move and pause meaningfully if you played around with how you arranged the utterances as individual lines and messed around with line breaks and punctuation.  Experimentation is how you will find your own best way to communicate how you are hearing and feeling these words.  The goal is to have a stranger who has never heard one of your poems before pick it up and read it with the cadences, pauses and suspensions that you give to the poem naturally.  Think about it like a composer learning to write down the melodies he/she hears in their head so that others can play them like the composer heard them.

    For me, honestly, the words are the easy part.  It is the arrangement of the words, punctuation and spacing that is where the hard work is in writing poetry.  But the extra effort is worth it when someone reads my poem and really "gets" it like I felt it when I wrote it.
  • lydiakuan
    藝術家空間 
    留言於2009-01-20 7:20AM [举报]
    i like your poetry.it's honest and direct.
  • mariejost
    藝術家空間 
    留言於2009-01-11 9:47AM [举报]
    I'm ready--let the poems appear.

    I certainly don't get hung up on rhyme or meter.  I leave and breathe free verse.  The first poem I wrote, when I was 9, was already free verse.  The funny thing is, I found that poem again when I was 23 when I was cleaning out some things at my parents' house after college.  Reading that poem again was mind blowing--I have no idea where my 9 year old experience drew that poem from.  We were told to write a poem for class, and I wrote about a rose and the impermanence of created things and the rose as a symbol of sorrow.  I wish I still had a copy of that poem, but my mother has moved since then and I am afraid that it went into the trash, along with everything else from my childhood.  Maybe I've just been trying to write that poem again, and so reclaim it, my entire adult life.

    Soon I'll be posting some poems I have been working on inspired by the work of a Chinese landscape painter, Lin Liang Feng, here on AnD.  I hope you will visit my blog when they are up.  I have had a very artistically inspiring year and have written many poems inspired by artists from Hong Kong and the Mainland.  Many of my poems are inspired by the work of other artists.  I never really considered myself a poet (in the world I inhabit poetry is not valued, and many even consider writing poetry a weird and subversive activity) but, after writing several hundred poems in the past 3 1/2 years, maybe I should embrace the title.:-)

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